WRITING ESSAYS
Chapter 9 • Revising Your Draft 137
The following essay shows how transitions link ideas within sentences
and paragraphs and connect one paragraph to the next. It also shows an-
other technique for achieving coherence: repeating key words and ideas
related to the main point. The transitions and key words are underlined.
I thought I would never make it to work today. I had an important
meeting, and it seemed as if everything was conspiring against me. The
conspiracy started before I even woke up.
I had set my alarm clock, but it didn’t go off, and therefore I didn’t
wake up on time. When I did wake up, I was already late, not just by a few
minutes but by an hour and a half. To save time, I brushed my teeth while
I showered. Also, I fi gured out what I was going to wear. Finally, I hopped
out of the shower ready to get dressed. But the conspiracy continued.
The next act of the conspiracy concerned my only clean shirt, which
was missing two buttons right in front. After fi nding a sweater that would
go over it, I ran to the bus stop.
When I got to the stop, I discovered that the buses were running late.
When one fi nally came, it was one of the old, slow ones, and it made stops
about every ten feet. In addition, the heat was blasting, and I was sweating
but couldn’t take off my sweater because my shirt was gaping open. Now
I was sweating, and perspiration was running down my scalp and neck.
At least, I thought, I’ll dry off by the time the bus gets to my work.
In fact, I did dry off a little, but the conspiracy didn’t end there.
When I fi nally got to work, the elevator was out of service, so I had to walk
up ten fl ights of stairs. I was drenched, late, and inappropriately dressed.
By the time I got to my desk, I knew that the hardest part of the day was
behind me.
PRACTICE 5 ADD TRANSITIONAL WORDS
Read the following paragraphs. In each blank, add a transition that would
smoothly connect the ideas. In each case, there is more than one right answer.
Answers will vary. Suggested answers follow.
EXAMPLE: Today, many workers are members of labor unions that
exist to protect worker rights.
However,
until the 1930s, unions did
not exist. In the 1930s, Congress passed laws that paved the way for
■ TEAMWORK
Practice 5 works well as
a collaborative exercise.
Have pairs of students
try to fi nd at least two
transitional words to
fi ll each blank and then
discuss which word
seems more appropri-
ate and why.
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