EDITING ESSAYS
564 Part Five • Other Grammar Concerns
raised three children before going to college and is now in her senior
year, was told she was too old to be an unpaid intern, even though the
position was for a college senior. She is suing the magazine. The next
day, another woman, age fi fty-one, reported that the same thing had
happened to her a year earlier, and she, too, had fi led an age discrimina-
tion suit. The suit was brought to court by the Council on Age Discrim-
ination, but the magazine didn’t appear for the court date, and the court
never took any follow-up action. Apparently, the matter was not of great
importance to either the magazine or the justice system.
Sentence variety is what gives your writing good rhythm and fl ow.
Practice Creating Sentence Variety
To create sentence variety, write sentences of different types and lengths.
Because many writers tend to write short sentences that start with the
subject, this chapter will focus on techniques for starting with something
other than the subject and for writing a variety of longer sentences.
Remember that the goal is to use variety to achieve a good rhythm. Do
not simply change all your sentences from one pattern to another, or you
still won’t have variety.
Start Some Sentences with Adverbs
Adverbs are words that describe verbs, adjectives, or other adverbs; they
often end with -ly. As long as the meaning is clear, you can place an
adverb at the beginning of a sentence or near the word it describes. An
adverb at the beginning is usually followed by a comma.
ADVERB AT BEGINNING Frequently, stories about haunted houses surface at
Halloween.
ADVERB NEAR A VERB Stories about haunted houses frequently surface at
Halloween.
ADVERB AT BEGINNING Often, these tales reveal the life stories of former
inhabitants.
ADVERB NEAR A VERB These tales often reveal the life stories of former
inhabitants.
■ For two additional
techniques used to
achieve sentence vari-
ety, coordination and
subordination, see
Chapter 30.
■ Answers to odd-
numbered practice
items are at the back
of the book.
■ For more about ad-
verbs, see Chapter 28.
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