EDITING ESSAYS
Chapter 24 • Run-Ons 419
A comma splice is two complete sentences joined by only a comma in-
stead of a comma and one of the following words: and, but, for, nor, or, so, yet.
COMMA SPLICE Anger is a dangerous emotion, it has many bad effects.
Comma
In the Real World, Why Is It Important
to Correct Run-Ons?
Run-ons are errors that many people, including instructors and employ-
ers, will notice, as the following example shows.
SITUATION: Marion is new to her position as a licensed practical nurse
at a large hospital. Each day, she updates patients’ records and writes brief
summaries of their progress for other nurses. The following is a report that
Marion wrote in her fi rst week on the job.
Trudari Kami is a premature infant she was born with a birth weight
of 1.7 pounds her lungs were not fully developed, she was not able to
breathe on her own. As of 2:15 a.m. on Thursday, April 6, she remains in
stable condition her condition is still critical though she is being carefully
monitored.
RESPONSE: Patty Maloney, the clinical nurse specialist profi led in
Chapter 13, had the following response to Marion’s report.
I had to meet with Marion, who is obviously not sure how to com-
municate clearly in medical documents. I explained to her that what she
had written was very diffi cult to understand, and I worked with her on
editing the report so that the next person would understand what Mar-
ion was trying to say. I had to do this because the reports must be clear;
otherwise, the next person might not be sure how to treat the baby.
Find and Correct Run-Ons
To fi nd run-ons, focus on each sentence in your writing one at a time.
Until you get used to fi nding run-ons, this step will take time, but after a
while you will not make the error as often.
Read the paragraph on the next page. Does it include any run-ons?
If so, how many?
Patty Maloney
Clinical Nurse
Specialist
(See Patty’s Profi le
of Success on
p. 208.)
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