WRITING ESSAYS
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THESIS LAST
Do you feel different during the different seasons? For many of us, the
short, dark days of winter are diffi cult: We feel tired, and we lack energy.
Most of us want to sleep more and eat hearty, hot meals. In the bright,
sunny days of summer, though, we come alive. Until quite recently, people
assumed that this was a psychological reaction, often tied, at least in the
United States, with childhood memories of the long, happy, carefree days
of summer when schools were shut down. But recently we’ve learned that
feeling better in summer isn’t just in our heads. Bright sunshine dramati-
cally improves people’s moods because of its effects on our brains.
What will both essays go on to describe?
how sunshine affects the brain
Remember, the thesis statement you write fi rst is a draft thesis: You can
modify it as often as you like while you write your essay.
Before selecting a writing assignment, read how a student, Derek
Johnson, developed a thesis statement from his narrowed topic. Before
writing his thesis, Derek did some freewriting about it.
GENERAL TOPIC Reality TV shows
NARROWED TOPIC The Apprentice
FREEWRITING: Some people think reality TV is stupid, and some of it
is, but there are also some good shows where you can learn a lot. Like
The Apprentice. This show shows real business situations and you get
to watch really smart people try to fi gure out how to do something in
the business world so they will be chosen as Trump’s apprentice. Trump
is a very rich man and knows the business world, and working for him
would be a great experience and probably have a good salary too. You
actually learn stuff while watching TV and it’s entertaining too. Other
shows like Fear Factor are just dumb but some are excellent.
Next, Derek decided on what point he wanted to make about The
Apprentice:
POINT The Apprentice is really a good show.
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